Draft essay(1a): Favorite Places

There are two favorite places.

First, my favorite place is "B2F of Tsuruya". In there, there are many favorite shops. It is "Afternoon tea", "Rope picnic" and "Lush" and so on. "Afternoon tea" is very cute goods shop. There are many goods of kitchen, bath room, cooking and so on. These are very cute. When I watch them, I always think that I want to live alone soon. "Rope picnic" is one of my favorite brand of clothes. I often buy some clothes in there. And "Lush" is soap shop. There are many kinds of soap, so this shop's smell is so good!!I often visit this floor in my free time. For example, it is before a part time job. This place is very comfortable for me and I like this place's atmosphere very much.

Second, my favorite place is "Koube" in hyougo prefecture. I visited there with my friend in last summer vacation. When I visited there, I like it very much. Because there are many attractive things!! First is beautiful view. I could look beautiful night view in harbor. This was very nice view. Second is fashionable. There are many fashionable people in Koube, so I felt that I'm in fashion magazine. Also, there are many fashionable shops in the town. Finally, there are many delicious foods. When I stay in Koube, I ate many foods. For example, it was koube meat, delicious cakes and so on. And there are many cute café in there. I went to café. In there, I got cute coffee. I was surprised very much!! Because of these things I thought that I want to live in Koube in the future.

These two places is my favorite place. When I am in there, I feel happy very much!! So, theses are very important place for me.
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Draft essay(1a): Outline

●My room
Comfortable
Relax
Magazines
TV

●Kobe
Beautiful view
Fashionable
Shops
Clothes
Exciting
Nice

●Tsuruya B2F
Shops
Clothes
Good smell
Comfortable
Cute goods

Draft essay(1a): Brainstorm

Favorite place

• comfortable
• nice
• relax
• good smell
• exciting
• beautiful view
• clothes
• magazines
• TV
• green
• fashionable
• shop
• cute goods